في فلسطين أم تنادي , "من عضو جديد"

[معتصم]

السلام العيكم
أنا عضو جديد يهذا المندى الرائع , وبعد تصفحي لمواضيعة المميزة , شدني حنين جارف إلى هواية صباي وهي الشعر , وهي الهواية التي إنشغلت عنها لسنوات , فقررت أن أعود إلى مذكرات المراهقة , فوجدت أول محاولة لى في الشعر الحر كتبتها وأنا في السنة الأولى ثانوي , بمناسبة اندلاع أنتفاصة الأقصى بعد زيارة النجس شارون للحرم القدسي , فكانت المحاولة كالتالي:
في فلسطين أم تنادي
تقطع الأنام , تدفن الأحلام
تنكس أعلام السلام
كيف لا وقد حل الدمار
كيف لا وقد جاء الكفار
جاؤو ومعهم جاء الموت
حلو ومعهم حل الصمت
في فلسطين أم تنادي
أنجدوني فقد عصر فؤادي
أنجدوني فقد قتل أولادي
في فلسطين زيتون توارى
فليس الزيتون يحيا في أرض الصحارى
حل مكانه عنب مولود
ونمى فيه ألف عنقود
ليس طعمه ككل عنقود
فهو الأن عنب حقود
عنب يثمر كره اليهود
فكيف يكون ككل عنقود
ليس العنب فقط من يكره اليهود
بل كل شيئ , بل حتى السلام يكره السهود
في أرض فلسطين أم تنادي
حمام أبيض كان في كل مكان
حمام طار إلى كل مكان
حمام لم يعد إلى هذا المكان
كيف يعود وقد ذهب الأمان ؟
أليس الحمام رمز الأمان ؟
في فلسطين أم نتادي
يكبر يوما بعد يوم لنا صغار
تخرج أوراقهم من بقايا الدمار
يكبرون ببرائة الصغار
ويحملون معهم ثأر الكبار
تكبر أجسادهم كحطب الأشجار
لتكون في الغد القريب لهبا من نار
وكل طفل أحرقت له دار
سيحرق لكم ألف دار
في فلسطين أم تنادي
بصوت يعانق السحاب
ويجري تغمه في كل وادي
تنادي باسم مريم العذراء
وباسم أرض زارها النبي في ليلة الإسراء
بسم مهد المسيح الكريم
وبسم قدس من الأقداس عضيم
فهيا يا مسلمين ويا مسيح
امتطو جيادا تسري مع الريح
فيكون الريح زوبعتة ذات قطر فسيح
تمحو اليهود وتبقي الضريح
فتذهب الريح ويبقى النسيم
فننشئ عندها وطن النعيم .

[djazayri]

أهلا وسهلا ومرحبا بك في منتدى الأدباء...
لن أُعلق على محاولتك الشعرية على الرغم من أنها راقت لي كثيرا بصراحة...وذلك لأدع الكلام في هذا الشأن لأساتذة المنتدى الذين سترى منهم ما يسرّك بإذن الله...أعدُك cupidarrow...

[HISKOS]

المهم ان تخترق حروفنا كل المجالات ان تزلزل الصمم دمت تثائر يا جميل

[ولد بلمجاهد]

أحيي فيك هذه الروح الأبية
سلمت يمينك

[علي قوادري]

اهلا بك اخي وبهذه المحاولة التي
تلامس جرحا لم يندمل بعد.
ننتظر مزيدا مما تكتب.

[أبو اسامة]

نظم جميل ومشاعر أجمل نحو الهم الإسلام والجرح الذي نتمنى من كل قلوبنا أن يندمل يوما.
بوركت وأهلا بك

[المشرف العام]

السلام عليكم و رحمة الله ..نرجوا من مشرفينا الكرام تنقيح المحاولة الادبية حتى نحاول نشرها على النسخة الورقية ...أرقى التحايا للجميع

[حمبراوي]

نظم جميل ومشاعر أجمل نحو الهم الإسلام والجرح الذي نتمنى من كل قلوبنا أن يندمل يوما.
بوركت وأهلا بك

ولكنها ليست جيدة فهي لا تعدو أن تكون محاولة وفي المنتدى أجود منها

[معتصم]

السلام عليكم
أولا لا يفوتني أن أشكر كل من مر ورد على محاولتي , كما أعد الإخوى أعضاء المنتدى أنني سوف أحاول قدر المستطاع إيراد محاولات جديدة , فزمالتكم في هذا المنتدى الراقي شرف أتقاصر دونه.
السلام عليكم.

[بـــروال آمـــال]

رآئع ما أبدعته و ما خطه قلمك
و يطول الكلام عن فلسطين حتى نعجز عن التعبير

أتمنى أن تعود لهوايتك فقد أجدتها حقا
تحياتي لك

[أم زيد]

نتألّم بشدة عندما نذكر فلسطين الحبيبة ..فلسطين الأسيرة
فكّ الله أسرها
إن للباطل جولة ستزول بعد حين ..ستزول بمشيئة الرحمان

محاولتك الشعرية جيدة وأنت كنت بالصف الأول ثانوي

أتمنى أن أقرأ لك مزيدا من الشعر الهادف.

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